tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6934738420827837500.post3670411539399318929..comments2012-06-08T01:01:13.027-07:00Comments on spring days, new growth: Hunger - 5 sentence fictionspring days, new growthhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/12809670414388039109noreply@blogger.comBlogger5125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6934738420827837500.post-4043446493193303822012-01-13T21:39:08.895-08:002012-01-13T21:39:08.895-08:00Well done! I especially like the "moonshine ...Well done! I especially like the "moonshine white" of the bones. My only suggestion would be to cut out "instinctively" and "to fill her gaping need" and see how it reads without them. It might have a little more punch.Ruth Donaldhttp://redonald.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6934738420827837500.post-67810309992356829682012-01-11T22:09:36.123-08:002012-01-11T22:09:36.123-08:00Yikes! Sounds like there might be two hungry peopl...Yikes! Sounds like there might be two hungry people in this story...either that or those berries aren't really there, or? Really wondered what was going to happen next!Jo-Anne (jtvancouver)http://www.goingforcoffee.blogspot.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6934738420827837500.post-1678968546266721592012-01-11T21:12:33.468-08:002012-01-11T21:12:33.468-08:00Great details in your story! The last line made me...Great details in your story! The last line made me jump too! Loved the added picture.R. J. Ropsenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06906115269276664336noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6934738420827837500.post-18337060878019376822012-01-11T19:45:49.339-08:002012-01-11T19:45:49.339-08:00I did the same thing! Great story :)I did the same thing! Great story :)Angie Richmondhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03427286424394081888noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6934738420827837500.post-69698233738580609192012-01-11T19:25:06.305-08:002012-01-11T19:25:06.305-08:00What a story! Well done. When I read the last line...What a story! Well done. When I read the last line, I said 'oh my goodness' out loud :) Great job!Lillie McFerrinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05367116687588265202noreply@blogger.com