Thursday, 3 November 2011

FSF - Bewitched

Five Sentence Fiction - Bewitched

What it’s all about: Five Sentence Fiction is about packing a powerful 
punch in a tiny fist. Each week I will post a one word inspiration, then 
anyone wishing to participate will write a five sentence story based on 
the inspiration word. The word does not have to appear in your five 
sentences, just take your inspiration from that word.

This week’s inspiration word is: BEWITCHED

He couldn’t take his eyes off her as she giggled and stretched her coltish legs, flicking her hair over her shoulder. She didn’t even know he existed as he watched her from under the trees, a lone satellite shadowing the popular crowd.
Head thrown back, she laughed from her belly at a joke unheard as he edged closer. He could see the penned inky hearts on her arm but they were not for him. Oh, for the courage to speak to her - the thought of it alone stopped his breath as he turned away downcast.


  1. I love 'a lone satellite shadowing the popular crowd.' There are so many kids who would relate to this simply insightful sentence. Awesome job!

  2. I thought this was great! Obviously a common problem with people of any age, and I loved the last sentence the best. Good work!

  3. Oh, the angst of the lone satellite...what a lovely use of words. It conjures up such a distinct picture. I can see him there. This is such a beautifully descriptive piece of work. Fantastic! Meg

  4. yep, the lone satellite got me too. I can just see him there on the fringe orbiting the 'stars'. thank god my teenage days are over!


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