“And then we will learn to put it out” declared
Sid, the new OH and S officer, as he confidently piled papers high. “Fire
training is compulsory, you know”.
Snickers in the back row - “sounds like Boy Scouts”, “ nah, Girl
Guides” “aren’t we a bit old for that?” as elbows nudged and eyes rolled.
“C’mon guys” sighed Sarah, “you know we
have to sign the whole group off or the boss won’t subsidise the Christmas
Party, lets just get on with it”.
“OK then Sarah, you can be my helper” Sid
smirked as he handed her the matches and beckoned her close. He did like a
pretty girl in panty hose. His chest puffed with importance, as he splashed
petrol over the papery tower. “Nothing like a fire-starter”.
Sarah hesitated as she opened the box and slid out a match,
“are you sure this is safe?”
“I’m the Safety Officer, sweetheart, of
course it’s safe” were the last words he uttered as the flames lept skywards.
Wow! Fantastic ending to this piece. So simple, yet the ending said a lot. Great job!
ReplyDeleteGreat plot! What a goose to do that! I would love to hear how this ends....
ReplyDeleteYou are brave to attempt dialogue - I worry too much about the correct punctuation! Good on you for using it to capture the characters characters!
hahahaha, I love it when tossers get their just deserves :) great job! very funny and realistic :)
ReplyDeleteEeeek! I hope Sarah got out of there in one piece! What a doofus Sid was, though. Safety officer, my sweet aunt Fanny! Funny!
ReplyDeleteI want to slap Sid. What a jerk! Haha. Love it :)
ReplyDeleteAlso-can I just say I LOVE that you have Nick Cave in your labels widget-one of my favourite singers evah :)
Ha ha - serves him right!
ReplyDeleteUgh, boys and their knowledge. This was fantastic!
ReplyDeleteFantastic ending. A perfect way to finish off this short story.
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Kate, this was well done. You gave us lots of detail, the character emerged quickly and you pulled us in from your very first line. You are a natural writer.
ReplyDeleteOh Sid! This is fantastic; I love the simplicity and power behind the final line.
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